My Worst walking Day Ever

 

 W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

                                                                

    Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

                           

                               First Draft

                      

                     

                          My Worst walking day ever.

I was walking down the river bank with my family. My dad was horrified  because he saw the lions getting ready to get him and my family. I was feeling frightened because my dad was terrified that he smelt the lions. I heard the lions roaring at me because they wanted me for their delicious lunch.

I could taste the feeling in my mouth that I was going to be eaten, but I wasn’t. On my body I felt so crushed because I had a lot of scratches on my face and body because the lion had sharp claws. When I got caught by the hungry lions it was really scary and it was like ‘Bam’ because she jumped on me and scratched me.  Then I saw the crocodile, I saw his razor sharp teeth and it was really big and scary. The lions were really scary because I could see their eyes flashing at my eyes like they were going to eat me. They played tug of war with me.

So now I finally got out of the enormous battle of the Kruger and I now I’m finally free for once. I feel so happy because I am out and with my lovely family.